ladestiny92 | Secrets [Prologue / ?]

Title: Secrets
Author: ladestiny92
Rating: T (probably will go up in later chapters)
Pairing: Ohmiya, Sakuraiba
Warning: Ohmiya Mpreg
Summary: Ohno was feeling tired and kept throwing up lately. He later found out he was pregnant. Not knowing how the others, especially Nino would react, he kept his condition a secret from everyone else.

Prologue

“Ohno-san, I finally got your result,” Akiya-sensei, Ohno’s doctor, said. “There’s a reason for your tiredness, and why you throw up almost everyday.”

“I’ve been following the diet you gave me, so it’s not because of food, is it?” Ohno asked. He knew the other members complained that he is too thin and didn’t eat enough, but he really did eat properly. It’s just that the food won’t stay inside.

Akiya-sensei shook his head. “In fact, it is a more serious matter.” He looked seriously at Ohno. “I know there’s not yet a scientific explanation for this, but Ohno-san, you’re pregnant.”

Upon hearing the news, Ohno could feel sparks of happiness in his heart, but at the same time, he felt his world crashing. ‘What if the others think he’s a freak?’ he thought. ‘What if Nino think he’s weird? How would the world accept it?’

“Ohno-san,” the doctor said, snapping Ohno out of his thought. Ohno looked at the doctor. “You’re still in your first trimester, so it is better not to exhaust yourself. Don’t stress yourself too much.” Then, Akiya-sensei wrote some things on a piece of paper. “These are the things you need to take; vitamins, healthy food, and so forth.” Ohno nodded his head. “We’ll meet again next week to see how you’re doing.”

Akiya-sensei looked at Ohno, who was still in a dazed state. “There’s also another way out, of course,” he added in, “if you doesn’t want to go through with it.”

“Thank you, sensei,” Ohno said, bowing at the doctor as he stood up. “Let me think about this thoroughly first.” Before he left, he said, “Akiya-sensei, could you keep this a secret. If the tabloid finds out…”

“I understand, Ohno-san,” Akiya-sensei said.

For the last two weeks, Ohno had been feeling unwell; constantly throwing up, and feeling tired. Even though he ate according to the diet arranged for him, Ohno is still quite thin. The members of Arashi had been persuading him to see a doctor for some time now, but he always shrugged it off as an unimportant thing; making excuses like he’s too busy with paper works and such. But today, when they were practicing their dance steps, Ohno finally collapses. That was the last straw for Nino.

“Satoshi, you will see a doctor even if I have to drag you there myself,” was what Nino told him four days ago. That’s why he made an appointment with his doctor, and today was the day the results came out.

For the rest of the day, Ohno had been given a day off. He decided to return home. As soon as he reached his apartment, Ohno sat on his couch. His cell phone had been ringing a few times now, but he didn’t answer it. He knew it was Nino, curious to know what’s wrong with him. But he couldn’t tell anyone yet. He needed to clear his thought and accept the fact.

‘What will Nino think about this,’ Ohno wondered. Ohno knew, he knew, although Nino loves him as do Ohno, he knew that Nino is still not ready for this, not ready for this kind of commitment.

‘What if he ask me to abort the child?’ Ohno thought again. Unconsciously, Ohno’s hand went to his stomach. He shut his eyes. No, he can’t let that happen. No matter what, the baby has nothing to do with this. He didn’t know why, but he felt protective of the baby.

After hours of thinking, Ohno had made up his mind. He WILL keep the baby, and even if he has to keep this a secret from Nino, from the world, he will do it. Ohno loves Nino, and until the latter is ready, he will wait patiently; wait until it is the right time to tell him the truth.

Flat | Top-Level Comments Only

It's not really the grammar that's the problem. It's the plot and the characterization. But maybe you should stick to writing in your native language? Just a suggestion.

And I don't have a LiveJournal account, sorry.

i think it's better if you'll not just comment. if she's gonna write it in her native language, how will the other fans read and understand her point since the universal language is ENGLISH? She's trying her best so please if you don't have anything good to write, just don't comment.

BTW, you don't have to have an account to make everyone recognize you. State whatever you wanted to be called. It's a sign of respect even if you put flames.

She (among others) would be better off writing in her native language for the fact that if you're not completely, completely fluent in English, your writing will always be subpar. With the amount of ESL fic writers (and readers), there are more than enough to constitute a fanbase or community. Her point would be better construed in her mother tongue because trust me, it does not translate well.

I am who I am, and I don't see how that's any of your business.

well, i think we are who we are too, ne? it's every OHMIYA fan's business to stick into this kind of situation. Not all are like YOU, so perfect and all.

We still understand her point, that's what matters most.

You don't have to be completely, completely fluent in English to be able to write and post stories in this journal.

And if keep on being a fickle-minded, better stay away from the site, where most authors are not completely, completely fluent in English. (I feel sad for you since I think you lack attention)

No need to get snippy, now. And sorry, let me rephrase that: You need to be completely, completely fluent in English (or have an extremely good beta) to post stories of good quality. Language is about expression and the accuracy to express yourself. Storytelling is much of the same but with an attention to detail-- it's about showing the story, immersing the reader in the situation; a feat which is quite difficult for those who are not fluent. As you said, a lot of authors aren't fluent in English in this fandom-- so why does everyone feel they must adhere to it?

that's why we register at a free journal, where everyone could share and post their thoughts about a certain thing. We respect English that's why everyone's trying their best to make it understandable. Most authors write apologies about grammatical errors and we understand them.

Why not try to read more fics, lower your pride and attitude about English, so that you'll understand what we mean.

Why not ask the beta readers, too? So you'll get to know their opinion.

And if you still keep doing this, its better to leave the site completely and come back when you're more respectful and more humane.

Good day!

Most authors write apologies, sure, but they also tend to disregard constructive criticism and refuse to use betas.

And frankly, there is no reason to lower my pride and/or attitude about English. It's rather offensive to apply that there is. One should never be expected to lower standards to accomodate something which could easily be solved.

frankly, why not offer yourself?

Offer myself for what, pray tell?

oh gawdd...who is this anonymous person? the most unreasonable person i've ever seen. mind you, the people in arashirabu are totally grand. and even if they want to voice out any grammar error, they do it nicely...and they help by showing where and how the writer can improve. i don't think you belong here cos if you do, you'll realize t

oii ! be resonable ! not even a hag in the world would ask you to read if u don't want to ...... so if u don't like it don't read ...... the writer did wrote the warning, baka ...... (*to the writer* srry for writing rude words in the comment but i'm pissed )

So that you know, my native language is Bahasa Malaysia...but I love writing in English.
If I keep writing, I know I will improve myself, so I won't let something like that stopping me.
Besides, if I know if I read more Arashi fanfics, and get more infos, I'll get the hang of it. This is just the second time I write Arashi fic so of course it is OOC.

No offense, but fanfiction is not exactly the best place to find out proper grammar or characterization, especially considering this fandom. I hate to sound elitist, but English is one of the most beautiful, expressive languages there is, and it's a shame to see it used improperly.

I know...and for your information, just based on my fanfiction, you can't just say I don't love English.
I do take English seriously. I'm not saying I'll use fanfiction as the only method to learn. I do learn at school. And, you know what, I just remembered a poem called If by Rudyard Kipling.
So, I will stop replying to you, and why don't you read that poem too. Probably you'll get some advice from there.

I'm not saying you don't love English. I'm sure you do. But maybe you should practice a bit more is all.

I'm sorry to say this, but I find you completely and utterly rude.

For one thing, people have their own rights to write about what they like. You can't just go up to a person and tell them to stop writing just because they might not be fluent in a certain language. If they don't practice through constant use in written and oral work, how are they ever going to improve?

And about not using fanfiction as a practice ground for grammar and spelling, I don't see at all why not. If a person is passionate about a certain fandom, then why not express it through fanfiction? Would you rather write on boring topics than write about something you would be inspired and enthusiastic to write? And LJ is open for everyone to view and comment. If authors just write and write and write without letting others read their works, then how would they ever find out what their weaknesses are?

Other than that, yes, there are people who completely ignore constructive criticism. But from the looks of it, the comment that you've given ladestiny92 isn't even along the lines of constructive and or helpful, instead it's far from it. Tell me, how is your "concrit" even beneficial to her if all you're telling her to do is to stop?

I don't mean any offense, but I will fight for the rights of an aspiring author. I'm not sure about you, but I thought that the plot and storyline wasn't bad, and the grammatical errors were not as bad as some that I have seen elsewhere. So, before you comment on anyone else's fics, I suggest that you think about what to say before you comment. The author's feelings apply too, not only your own. And if you have nothing constructive or nice to say, then just don't say it, please.

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